Ooh, I love Man Vs. Nature (and I have a sneaking fondness for Man Vs. His GI Tract too). That part was awesome.
I like how you played your emotional tones too--I feel like this story could easily have been "rip your heart out and stomp on it," and that would have worked fine for the content, but I liked "weary and sad" better. Nice job.
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Date: 2010-04-13 04:54 pm (UTC)I like how you played your emotional tones too--I feel like this story could easily have been "rip your heart out and stomp on it," and that would have worked fine for the content, but I liked "weary and sad" better. Nice job.